octavia_cade's review
1.0
Honestly, this did not work for me at all. It read very much like an early draft - an impression reinforced by the fact that the ebook I purchased was positively littered with grammatical errors and typos. This really should have been proofread before it was published. The bigger problem, however, was that there's just too much going on. This is a novella of just over 30,000 words (so Smashwords tells me), which means that there's limited space to tell a story... and there's just so much thrown at the wall here. It seemed like every couple of pages there was some weird new twist, not very organically integrated with the rest of the text, and there just wasn't time to do any of it justice. As a result it felt frantically disjointed - not in a good way - and in places confused. The same thing happened with the related short story included at the end of the volume, which was frankly incomprehensible.
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