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goliathfrog's review against another edition
3.0
I actually really enjoyed this and it was definitely going to be a 4 star, HOWEVER the ending is extremely abrupt and felt like an unnatural break for the story. It’s not quite a cliffhanger in the way of there being a really distressing situation or conflict, but it’s also in the middle of a conversation so it seemed weird. There’s also not a big climax or high action point in this story, it feels almost like part I of a big novel rather than book I of a series if that makes sense. I could easily see the 3 books here combined into one 3 part fantasy novel and I feel like that would make more sense.
But as far as the storyline and world development and character development I like where this is going! I just wish it went further.
But as far as the storyline and world development and character development I like where this is going! I just wish it went further.
jossreviews's review against another edition
adventurous
emotional
hopeful
mysterious
tense
fast-paced
- Plot- or character-driven? A mix
- Strong character development? It's complicated
- Loveable characters? Yes
- Diverse cast of characters? No
- Flaws of characters a main focus? Yes
4.0
kselias's review against another edition
slow-paced
- Plot- or character-driven? Plot
- Strong character development? No
- Loveable characters? N/A
- Diverse cast of characters? No
- Flaws of characters a main focus? No
2.5
slimcakeyreads's review against another edition
4.0
Okay I wavered between a very strong three and a very low four stars...I’m going with four because I found myself wishing I could get a minute to myself to read this book throughout the day and that hasn’t happened in a while.
That being said, there were some technical issues. The verb tensing is all over the place and at times it was very jarring, also there were many issues with grammar and with getting words mixed up or leaving them out completely. The prose could have used more description and less Fi 24/7 as well....BUT, this book has the feel of a first novel by an indie author and it is obviously a labor of love. Side note: when I read books that need this much work I so badly wish I could reach out to the author and offer my free Alpha reading services because I swear the errors in this book could have been fixed by one very honest friend giving it a read through.
The story itself checked all the boxes...interesting premise, pacing was pretty good, and the ending was interesting. I liked the slow introduction and the reasoning behind her harem....though I feel Fi overshadows all three guys and I am so grateful there were finally some chapters from their perspectives towards the end. Before that they were feeling like cardboard cutouts with no depth.
I will say I think the author really likes Bryn the best as he has the most personality and the most fire (haha, see what I did there...if not read the book and you’ll get it)....
All in all, were there some cringy bits like schools that pay students to attend and where everyone lives in a utopia of salad bars and sexual freedom? Yes. Did one of her harem members feel like a sad little puppy dog with no spine and no personality for the first half of the book? Yes. Can I take these things with a grain of salt and just read the next book because I’m interested in where the story goes?
I think so.
That being said, there were some technical issues. The verb tensing is all over the place and at times it was very jarring, also there were many issues with grammar and with getting words mixed up or leaving them out completely. The prose could have used more description and less Fi 24/7 as well....BUT, this book has the feel of a first novel by an indie author and it is obviously a labor of love. Side note: when I read books that need this much work I so badly wish I could reach out to the author and offer my free Alpha reading services because I swear the errors in this book could have been fixed by one very honest friend giving it a read through.
The story itself checked all the boxes...interesting premise, pacing was pretty good, and the ending was interesting. I liked the slow introduction and the reasoning behind her harem....though I feel Fi overshadows all three guys and I am so grateful there were finally some chapters from their perspectives towards the end. Before that they were feeling like cardboard cutouts with no depth.
I will say I think the author really likes Bryn the best as he has the most personality and the most fire (haha, see what I did there...if not read the book and you’ll get it)....
All in all, were there some cringy bits like schools that pay students to attend and where everyone lives in a utopia of salad bars and sexual freedom? Yes. Did one of her harem members feel like a sad little puppy dog with no spine and no personality for the first half of the book? Yes. Can I take these things with a grain of salt and just read the next book because I’m interested in where the story goes?
I think so.
sprinkled's review against another edition
adventurous
emotional
medium-paced
- Plot- or character-driven? Character
- Strong character development? No
- Loveable characters? Yes
- Diverse cast of characters? No
- Flaws of characters a main focus? Yes
4.5
azelius's review against another edition
adventurous
lighthearted
fast-paced
- Plot- or character-driven? Character
- Strong character development? Yes
- Loveable characters? It's complicated
- Diverse cast of characters? Yes
- Flaws of characters a main focus? No
3.0
The skin color of the mc described in the book doesn't match the cover at all.
It could be a great story but it feels shallow and too much like it's trying to complete a checklist also no one's nipples get hard so much.
It could be a great story but it feels shallow and too much like it's trying to complete a checklist also no one's nipples get hard so much.
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