thinde's review
2.0
DNF 77%
Just a bland read.
A quarter of the text could be cut, as it consists of pointless dialogue or narrative cul-de-sacs. E.g. Why spend two pages talking about why taking a ship would be a bad idea, so they should ride horses?
The characters all seem to have the same voice. The antagonist has no obvious motivation. The action set-pieces are childishly simple.
This seems like an apprentice work at best.
Just a bland read.
A quarter of the text could be cut, as it consists of pointless dialogue or narrative cul-de-sacs. E.g. Why spend two pages talking about why taking a ship would be a bad idea, so they should ride horses?
The characters all seem to have the same voice. The antagonist has no obvious motivation. The action set-pieces are childishly simple.
This seems like an apprentice work at best.
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