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veronicadidato's review
adventurous
fast-paced
1.5
Logic does not hold up in this story.
The soldier asks the firefighter what to do in a "combat" situation? The soldier stays with the hostage while the firefighter goes to scout out a building with possible enemies in it? The soldier with training in diffusing bombs (sure, it was inadequate...I'll get to that later) leaves the firefighter to deal with a bomb situation on a boat because he...went "firefighter mode" on her and was very strict?
In what world does that make sense? If the soldier had been a guy, he'd be the dashing hero who took charge without any questions and would be the last one off that boat. But because the soldier happened to be a woman, she's acting like she has no combat training and experience. And the dude firefighter got those things instead, even though she's the one with more experience and training for this particular situation.
Because she does have experience! She's a small woman (this was made very clear) but she was still in Special Forces and has been in an active warzone on the frontlines. But she has inadequate training...that wouldn't happen, especially if she were Special Forces. She wouldn't even get into it if she wasn't properly trained! And she's been in active combat so she definitely does have enough experience to not be as passive as she is in this story.
Here's a snapshot of things that didn't make sense:
She drinks alcohol in a situation where she needs a clear head
He tells her to get away from the window and blows out the candle when an unknown car approaches, instead of her
A flashlight shifts between reaching the bottom of a shaft and not, for the convenience of "suspense"
She notes that he's calm and grounded, and clear-headed when she's not (even though she's the one with actual combat training and experience, so she at least should be calm too)
A bomb might go off any minute (as they remind you every other page), but he makes tea...
Just to name a few. As said, logic does not hold up. It's also insulting to women in the military, they deserve better than this. Let her take charge where it makes sense. It's not that hard.
The plus 0.5 star was just because it at least isn't littered with spelling mistakes and similar.
The soldier asks the firefighter what to do in a "combat" situation? The soldier stays with the hostage while the firefighter goes to scout out a building with possible enemies in it? The soldier with training in diffusing bombs (sure, it was inadequate...I'll get to that later) leaves the firefighter to deal with a bomb situation on a boat because he...went "firefighter mode" on her and was very strict?
In what world does that make sense? If the soldier had been a guy, he'd be the dashing hero who took charge without any questions and would be the last one off that boat. But because the soldier happened to be a woman, she's acting like she has no combat training and experience. And the dude firefighter got those things instead, even though she's the one with more experience and training for this particular situation.
Because she does have experience! She's a small woman (this was made very clear) but she was still in Special Forces and has been in an active warzone on the frontlines. But she has inadequate training...that wouldn't happen, especially if she were Special Forces. She wouldn't even get into it if she wasn't properly trained! And she's been in active combat so she definitely does have enough experience to not be as passive as she is in this story.
Here's a snapshot of things that didn't make sense:
She drinks alcohol in a situation where she needs a clear head
He tells her to get away from the window and blows out the candle when an unknown car approaches, instead of her
A flashlight shifts between reaching the bottom of a shaft and not, for the convenience of "suspense"
She notes that he's calm and grounded, and clear-headed when she's not (even though she's the one with actual combat training and experience, so she at least should be calm too)
A bomb might go off any minute (as they remind you every other page), but he makes tea...
Just to name a few. As said, logic does not hold up. It's also insulting to women in the military, they deserve better than this. Let her take charge where it makes sense. It's not that hard.
The plus 0.5 star was just because it at least isn't littered with spelling mistakes and similar.
jennadb's review
5.0
Great story. It's short but good. Can't wait for the next one. Dal gets caught up in something he is unaware of and Emily is sent from the american embassy to help him. On the run and hiding will they survive?
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