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A review by camiandkitread
The Bone Spindle by Leslie Vedder
Did not finish book. Stopped at 12%.
I try to give debuts a lot of grace on pacing and jerky writing, etc. but this was too much.
Why does every paragraph start with “Fi???”
“Fi lifted her finger…” “Fi resisted the urge…” “Fi finished writing…” “Fi stumbled…” All of that is on the same page and they’re pretty much all like that. Awful lot of telling going on, not a lot of showing. And the repetition is just maddening—I can’t focus on the story because my eyes are searching for the same words being used over and over.
Why does every paragraph start with “Fi???”
“Fi lifted her finger…” “Fi resisted the urge…” “Fi finished writing…” “Fi stumbled…” All of that is on the same page and they’re pretty much all like that. Awful lot of telling going on, not a lot of showing. And the repetition is just maddening—I can’t focus on the story because my eyes are searching for the same words being used over and over.