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A review by nixwolfwood
Breaking Lauren by Jordan Deen
3.0
This was a quick read. Interesting story. All the drama.
My biggest issue was there were a lot of inconsistencies. It made it hard to keep track of the story. I found no issues with the grammar, but it is in need of a content editor. There were too many instances where I wasn't entirely sure what was going on.
Of all the characters, Danny was my favorite. I liked him and his family. Even if I didn't like how they acted, the characters had depth. Lauren annoyed the hell out of me. And her parents, they just didn't make any sense to me. I couldn't relate to them and they felt hollow.
It was good, kept me interested. Needs work.
http://www.platypire.com/j-hooligan/breaking-lauren-by-jordan-deen
My biggest issue was there were a lot of inconsistencies. It made it hard to keep track of the story. I found no issues with the grammar, but it is in need of a content editor. There were too many instances where I wasn't entirely sure what was going on.
Of all the characters, Danny was my favorite. I liked him and his family. Even if I didn't like how they acted, the characters had depth. Lauren annoyed the hell out of me. And her parents, they just didn't make any sense to me. I couldn't relate to them and they felt hollow.
It was good, kept me interested. Needs work.
http://www.platypire.com/j-hooligan/breaking-lauren-by-jordan-deen