A review by mousegoddess
Ambushing Ariel by S.E. Smith

1.0

I...I don't even know how to rate this. The story itself wasn't awful and the writing was competent but the editing was atrocious. Who needs complete sentences? Who needs consistent tenses? What crazy talk this is. And word choices. I don't think those words mean what the author thinks they mean, I *know* they don't. It was RIDICULOUS. I honestly don't understand how people can read this without being jarred. I guess what I'm saying is the storytelling was okay, but the author needs a better proofreader in a baaaaaad way. If only to make sure the tenses are consistent. And so someone realizes that a withering body isn't sexy.