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A review by rachaelarsenault
Marked by Kristin Cast, P.C. Cast
slow-paced
- Strong character development? No
- Loveable characters? No
- Diverse cast of characters? It's complicated
- Flaws of characters a main focus? No
0.25
I read this book a while back but never got around to adding a review. I figure it's better late than never. "Marked" is one of those frustrating books where I see promise in the premise but the execution is absolutely abysmal.
What I wanted: A book about a teen girl pulled between two lives - her old life as a human and her new life as a fledgling - who is gifted with great powers and a mysterious burden by a goddess, who struggles to fit in and fights for the underdog, whose friends are diverse and quirky.
What I got: A spoiled, elitist brat who insults anyone who doesn't fit her definition of cool or attractive, who praises herself for being open-minded while simultaneously being deeply prejudiced, who constantly looks down on others, and who settles into a position of power and importance with little effort or difficulty.
Zoey is insufferable. She claims to be a nerd and laments not fitting in, but attracts attention of the hottest guys in school as a human and a fledgling, instantly has a faithful entourage of friends, and really only gets flak from a small section of the school populace. Given that the people who give her a hard time are the designated Mean Girls of the story, that's hardly remarkable: They're mean to everyone. Moreover, Zoey doesn't seem to like anyone. She insults chess players, redheads, people with eating disorders, gay men (we'll get to that), black people (we'll also get to this), people struggling in school, poor people, etc. ad nauseum. Honestly, belittling other people is her defining character trait.
While Zoey does have a token gay friend, that doesn't excuse her from bigotry. She praises Damien by saying he "isn't a swishy girly-guy". In other words, he's not "too gay". She and her friends also make a point to emphasize that Damien's sexuality means he isn't really a guy, which is an incredibly offensive notion. Zoey also has a token black friend named Shaunee, but that doesn't stop her from having narrow-minded views of black people. For example, when meeting another black girl, Zoey is quick to dismiss the girl's long hair as being a weave, playing into a racist notion that black people can't possibly have naturally long hair. There's also the fact that Damien and Shaunee's characters are almost entirely defined by their tokenism: Damien is sassy, sensitive, and artistic; Shaunee is angry, sassy, and sensual.
Zoey is also horrible toward other girls, which is truly distressing in a story aimed at young teens and praised as progressive and empowering for said audience. At every turn, Zoey is hating on other women for any variety of reasons: They flirt with a boy she likes, they flirt with a boy she used to like but is dead-set against actually dating, they flirt with their own boyfriend, they wear clothing she doesn't like, they engage in sexual acts she doesn't like - in fact, a lot of Zoey's hatred toward other girls revolves around slut shaming. The antagonist of this book, Aphrodite, is hated on primarily because she is sexually confident and expressive. Her actual villainy is mostly dismissed - even though it includes refusing to report psychic visions that could save dozens of lives. Moreover, the way Zoey attacks her for her sexuality is nonsensical. An example of this is found early on in the book when Zoey stumbles across Aphrodite giving a blowjob to her boyfriend. The fact that the blowjob was against the boy's will and performed in the middle of a hallway is barely given a second thought; instead, what matters is that she was giving a blowjob. Apparently, only hateful, brain-dead sluts give blowjobs. For a series that's all about girl power, this is a deeply troubling view to espouse.
This isn't even touching on the writing, which is incredibly poor. There are numerous asides that interrupt the narrative, often killing the tension and serving no real purpose. The writing frequently shows instead of telling. Plus, Zoey can't maintain a consistent narrative voice. Sometimes she sounds like she's twelve, using words like "gihugic", "poopie", and giggling when she comments on "boobies" or calls something "gay". But then she'll suddenly start narrating poetically, describing moonlight as "spilled mercury" or saying that "raw fear engulfed [her] like a bitter wind." It makes it difficult to stay immersed in the story or get a clear idea of what Zoey's personality and maturity is actually supposed to be.
Even from a less technical standpoint, the narrative is pretty awful. The pacing is terrible - for example, at the beginning of the story Zoey needs to get to the House of Night so she can be around adult vampyres and avoid dying from Rejecting the Change. That sounds like it should be urgent, but the first four chapters are basically her going from one drawn out argument to the next. When characters stand around talking about how important and urgent something is for five pages instead of actually doing anything, it feels like maybe the stakes aren't so high. And it never gets better: A third of the book is spent following Zoey around for her first day of classes. A few important things happen, but not enough to warrant consuming so much time in the narrative. It isn't until page 160 that we have any sense of what the actual goal or conflict is in this book - and then, when we get to the climax, a completely out-of-nowhere antagonist appears and is almost immediately dismissed without any real struggle on the part of the protagonists.
The world-building is shoddy, too. It's essentially a patchwork of randomly capitalized words to signal they're important, dismissing actual folkloric ideas about vampirism, and picking random celebrities or historical figures and going, "Hey, this person is actually a vampyre!" Then throw in a matriarchal power structure that is still somehow deeply misogynistic and call it a day. If you take more than a few seconds to question how things work, the whole world starts to fall apart pretty quickly.
Overall, this is a terribly written, deeply offensive, and incredibly disappointing book. I've continued reading the series out of a purely academic interest - there is no true enjoyment to be gained from it.
What I wanted: A book about a teen girl pulled between two lives - her old life as a human and her new life as a fledgling - who is gifted with great powers and a mysterious burden by a goddess, who struggles to fit in and fights for the underdog, whose friends are diverse and quirky.
What I got: A spoiled, elitist brat who insults anyone who doesn't fit her definition of cool or attractive, who praises herself for being open-minded while simultaneously being deeply prejudiced, who constantly looks down on others, and who settles into a position of power and importance with little effort or difficulty.
Zoey is insufferable. She claims to be a nerd and laments not fitting in, but attracts attention of the hottest guys in school as a human and a fledgling, instantly has a faithful entourage of friends, and really only gets flak from a small section of the school populace. Given that the people who give her a hard time are the designated Mean Girls of the story, that's hardly remarkable: They're mean to everyone. Moreover, Zoey doesn't seem to like anyone. She insults chess players, redheads, people with eating disorders, gay men (we'll get to that), black people (we'll also get to this), people struggling in school, poor people, etc. ad nauseum. Honestly, belittling other people is her defining character trait.
While Zoey does have a token gay friend, that doesn't excuse her from bigotry. She praises Damien by saying he "isn't a swishy girly-guy". In other words, he's not "too gay". She and her friends also make a point to emphasize that Damien's sexuality means he isn't really a guy, which is an incredibly offensive notion. Zoey also has a token black friend named Shaunee, but that doesn't stop her from having narrow-minded views of black people. For example, when meeting another black girl, Zoey is quick to dismiss the girl's long hair as being a weave, playing into a racist notion that black people can't possibly have naturally long hair. There's also the fact that Damien and Shaunee's characters are almost entirely defined by their tokenism: Damien is sassy, sensitive, and artistic; Shaunee is angry, sassy, and sensual.
Zoey is also horrible toward other girls, which is truly distressing in a story aimed at young teens and praised as progressive and empowering for said audience. At every turn, Zoey is hating on other women for any variety of reasons: They flirt with a boy she likes, they flirt with a boy she used to like but is dead-set against actually dating, they flirt with their own boyfriend, they wear clothing she doesn't like, they engage in sexual acts she doesn't like - in fact, a lot of Zoey's hatred toward other girls revolves around slut shaming. The antagonist of this book, Aphrodite, is hated on primarily because she is sexually confident and expressive. Her actual villainy is mostly dismissed - even though it includes refusing to report psychic visions that could save dozens of lives. Moreover, the way Zoey attacks her for her sexuality is nonsensical. An example of this is found early on in the book when Zoey stumbles across Aphrodite giving a blowjob to her boyfriend. The fact that the blowjob was against the boy's will and performed in the middle of a hallway is barely given a second thought; instead, what matters is that she was giving a blowjob. Apparently, only hateful, brain-dead sluts give blowjobs. For a series that's all about girl power, this is a deeply troubling view to espouse.
This isn't even touching on the writing, which is incredibly poor. There are numerous asides that interrupt the narrative, often killing the tension and serving no real purpose. The writing frequently shows instead of telling. Plus, Zoey can't maintain a consistent narrative voice. Sometimes she sounds like she's twelve, using words like "gihugic", "poopie", and giggling when she comments on "boobies" or calls something "gay". But then she'll suddenly start narrating poetically, describing moonlight as "spilled mercury" or saying that "raw fear engulfed [her] like a bitter wind." It makes it difficult to stay immersed in the story or get a clear idea of what Zoey's personality and maturity is actually supposed to be.
Even from a less technical standpoint, the narrative is pretty awful. The pacing is terrible - for example, at the beginning of the story Zoey needs to get to the House of Night so she can be around adult vampyres and avoid dying from Rejecting the Change. That sounds like it should be urgent, but the first four chapters are basically her going from one drawn out argument to the next. When characters stand around talking about how important and urgent something is for five pages instead of actually doing anything, it feels like maybe the stakes aren't so high. And it never gets better: A third of the book is spent following Zoey around for her first day of classes. A few important things happen, but not enough to warrant consuming so much time in the narrative. It isn't until page 160 that we have any sense of what the actual goal or conflict is in this book - and then, when we get to the climax, a completely out-of-nowhere antagonist appears and is almost immediately dismissed without any real struggle on the part of the protagonists.
The world-building is shoddy, too. It's essentially a patchwork of randomly capitalized words to signal they're important, dismissing actual folkloric ideas about vampirism, and picking random celebrities or historical figures and going, "Hey, this person is actually a vampyre!" Then throw in a matriarchal power structure that is still somehow deeply misogynistic and call it a day. If you take more than a few seconds to question how things work, the whole world starts to fall apart pretty quickly.
Overall, this is a terribly written, deeply offensive, and incredibly disappointing book. I've continued reading the series out of a purely academic interest - there is no true enjoyment to be gained from it.
Content Warnings
Graphic: Death and Blood
Moderate: Body shaming, Homophobia, Misogyny, Sexual assault, Sexual content, Vomit, and Religious bigotry
Minor: Ableism, Alcoholism, and Eating disorder
Sex shaming