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A review by tee_m
The Lord Next Door by Gayle Callen
2.0
This book was a lesson in grammar. Not the good kind either. It was kind of an example of all the things you shouldn’t do when writing anything but a text message. (Probably harsh judgment, but bare with me.)
There were so many syntax errors, run-on lines, and missing punctuations, that I was shocked. The author started sentences and entire paragraphs, with conjunctions; particularly the use of And’ and ‘But’. The latter happened at least once on every page. (If you think I’m exaggerating, open a random page in the book.)
There were paragraphs whose first lines were the tail end of the preceding paragraph. How someone could have missed the errors confounds me. The conjunctions were entirely unnecessary too. Many of the sentences could have been fixed by simply deleting the connectors (or switching them with an alternative.)
The premise underlying the plot was also illogical. The FMC’s family was in dire state financially having lost all their wealth. The FMC remembered she had a childhood best friend living in the Earl’s estate next to hers. The best friend happened to be a kitchen boy. I don’t understand why the FMC thought it was a good idea to go to a kitchen boy for financial help with saving her family’s estate. I mean does he secretly invest in Bitcoins? What exactly was the plan? Marry a kitchen boy, save her estate?
I wish I could say the characters came alive or the world did. But nope. (See I just did it. Darn conjunctions!)
There were so many syntax errors, run-on lines, and missing punctuations, that I was shocked. The author started sentences and entire paragraphs, with conjunctions; particularly the use of And’ and ‘But’. The latter happened at least once on every page. (If you think I’m exaggerating, open a random page in the book.)
There were paragraphs whose first lines were the tail end of the preceding paragraph. How someone could have missed the errors confounds me. The conjunctions were entirely unnecessary too. Many of the sentences could have been fixed by simply deleting the connectors (or switching them with an alternative.)
The premise underlying the plot was also illogical. The FMC’s family was in dire state financially having lost all their wealth. The FMC remembered she had a childhood best friend living in the Earl’s estate next to hers. The best friend happened to be a kitchen boy. I don’t understand why the FMC thought it was a good idea to go to a kitchen boy for financial help with saving her family’s estate. I mean does he secretly invest in Bitcoins? What exactly was the plan? Marry a kitchen boy, save her estate?
I wish I could say the characters came alive or the world did. But nope. (See I just did it. Darn conjunctions!)