A review by whodawala
Breach of Peace by Daniel B. Greene
3.0
I’ve been watching Daniel Greene for nearly a year now, and was excited to pick up his debut piece. Sadly, it fell short in a few places for me, but it was overall an enjoyable read.
Cons:
1) The dialogue felt pretty clunky. A lot of the conversations felt as if Daniel was telling us what to take away from them rather than us finding it out ourselves, and there were a lot of weird cliches and sentence-finishing.
2) I just wasn’t invested in the characters. Without getting too spoilery, a bunch of tragic shit happens at the end but I didn’t care all too much because the characters it happened too hadn’t been developed enough. I understand that this was a novella, but I needed something more there, and I’m not even a character based reader.
Pros:
1) What I am, however, is a plot based reader. On that count, I’d give full makes- the plot was intriguing and had me read the whole novella in a sitting.
2) The pacing was good and the world building was ample as one could expect from a novella. The hints given about the world were intriguing and made me want to know more while still providing enough details to let me understand what was going on.
This seemed like a pretty standard first foray into writing fantasy, and I hope to read more as Daniel improves and builds this world out.
Cons:
1) The dialogue felt pretty clunky. A lot of the conversations felt as if Daniel was telling us what to take away from them rather than us finding it out ourselves, and there were a lot of weird cliches and sentence-finishing.
2) I just wasn’t invested in the characters. Without getting too spoilery, a bunch of tragic shit happens at the end but I didn’t care all too much because the characters it happened too hadn’t been developed enough. I understand that this was a novella, but I needed something more there, and I’m not even a character based reader.
Pros:
1) What I am, however, is a plot based reader. On that count, I’d give full makes- the plot was intriguing and had me read the whole novella in a sitting.
2) The pacing was good and the world building was ample as one could expect from a novella. The hints given about the world were intriguing and made me want to know more while still providing enough details to let me understand what was going on.
This seemed like a pretty standard first foray into writing fantasy, and I hope to read more as Daniel improves and builds this world out.