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A review by orcamagicka
The Witch King by H.E. Edgmon
adventurous
dark
emotional
hopeful
medium-paced
- Plot- or character-driven? A mix
- Strong character development? It's complicated
- Loveable characters? It's complicated
- Diverse cast of characters? Yes
- Flaws of characters a main focus? Yes
1.5
So much potential, so much disappointment.
I would like to preface by saying that like the MC, I am also a queer trans teenager. Just as it’s important to read Own Voices books, it’s also equally important to read Own Voices reviews.
Starting off the the positives, the amount of diverse representation in the book is commendable. Diversity like this is rare in the fantasy genre, and I’m happy more YA fantasy books are making the effort to include a diverse array of characters in their story. This story includes trans, non-binary, queer relationships, polyamory, disability rep, and BIPOC characters.
However the representation is pretty much the ONLY good thing about this story, and even that isn’t saying much. If anything that’s my best guess why I’m constantly seeing so much hype for this story. Everything else that’s supposed to make a story good amounts to nothing in this book. The writing style and the inclusion of internet lingo and humor ripped directly off of Tumblr and Twitter had me cringing and rolling my eyes every chapter. Not only was it incredibly dated, cringey, and fell flat as humor, it broke my immersion with the *fantasy* world building. I never want to see the words “mcfuckin”, “yeet”, “vibin”, or “I’m just a gay little worm” (I’m NOT even exaggerating on that one) in a novel ever again or I’m going to bang my head into a wall. It turns out the author admitted in an interview he used TikTok as a means of “researching teen humor”. My hot tip for any YA authors, don’t do this.
The characterizations were incredibly weak. The side characters were under developed, had the exact same sense of humor and way of speaking, and were unremarkable. Most of the queer characters just felt like collections of stereotypes plucked off of Tumblr or Twitter, and that’s what their entire personalities and senses of humor revolved around. It seemed that the author was so caught up trying to write DIVERSE characters, he forgot to write diverse CHARACTERS. I’m shocked that this is an “own voices” story considering the poor writing for the queer characters and how they felt more like internet caricatures of queer people. I would honestly use this book as an example of how to NOT write queer characters. The world also felt very unfinished and inconsistent. On one hand it can be argued that this is the first installment of a duology and the characters and world will likely develop more in the sequel. But I’ve read so many series that were able to do so much more with less of a word count just within a first installment. And considering that this book is 422 PAGES long, there is very little excuse for having such bland writing.
The antagonists were some of the worst I’ve seen. The main villain is barely seen nor heard from throughout the story and he has some of the most basic, cliche villain dialogue that had me rolling my eyes. He was literally a rip off of the blue-eyed-blond-haired Neo Nazi villain trope you see in most action movies. And what kind of name is Derek for a fantasy villain??? The twist villain had me confused and beyond annoyed. And again, immediately started spouting off the same cliche lines and “maniacal laughter” you see in every other basic cheesy story once they were revealed to be an antagonist. Antagonists are usually some of my favorite characters in the story since they work to drive the plot and conflict, but these characters were so little seen and so bland that I couldn’t take them nor their threats seriously. Also how on earth was Derek still in position of the Guard despite being an obvious terrorist against the monarchy? That made no sense?
The story lends itself to be a “political allegory” with “radical” views as the author states, yet it completely lacks subtly. The author treats his audience like they’re incompetent and have to have their hand held throughout the entire story. The main character literally explains the parallels between the treatment of witches by the Fae and persecution of queer people in the human world, as if that wasn’t completely obvious. There are also many more spelled out parallels regarding police brutality, social justice movements, and defunding the police that felt very heavy handed. At the end of the book there was an out of the blue scene that basically mirrored the “dismantle the police” movement, which felt very out of place and not even realistic dialogue for one of the characters. And then at the VERY END of the book, after hundreds of pages of trying to sort out the heir situation, suddenly the characters pull a Game of Thrones season 7 and argue for Democracy?? Where was all this at for the first 420 pages?? Both these scenes felt so heavy handed and random and just felt like the author was trying to squeeze in as many social justice messages as he could without bothering to cohesively weave them into the story. Plenty of young adult stories do an excellent job of writing allegories for modern issues in a complex, nuanced way while allowing the readers to understand the issues. This book is not one of them.
I’m usually one to LOVE an “unlikable” character, but Wyatt is beyond one of the most annoying, edgy, and stagnant protagonists I’ve ever read in a story. I honestly felt nothing towards him, he could have dropped dead and I wouldn’t have cared. He’s not smart. He not kind. He’s not brave. He’s not good at magic and he doesn’t even TRY to learn despite constantly COMPLAINING how he can’t control his abilities and that he’s a “monster”. He doesn’t lead. He’s not anything. He contributes nothing to the story except through reacting to plot points thrown in to make the book less boring. And the constant self depreciating monologue and self wallowing pitty party worked against him and only made me agree with his negative self talk even more. I also felt uncomfortable with the way he talked about some of the female characters, especially Briar and all the sexual comments he made about her. And his off handed remark about the lesbian queens left a bad taste in my mouth. Can we please have trans male characters in books without writing them to be borderline misogynists?
The “romance” in between Wyatt and Emyr is some of the weakest I’ve seen. I usually love a good queer enemies-to-lovers story, but I felt absolutely nothing towards the two. Maybe I’m just not a fan of the “fated mates” trope or the fact that most of their romantic chemistry was from when they were children, but I couldn’t feel any excitement towards them. There was way more telling instead of showing when it came to their interactions, mainly consisting of just Wyatt internally moaning about how attractive yet annoying Emyr is anytime he’s on page.
I wanted to like this book so badly. Trans characters are a rarity in fiction, especially in fantasy. I was able to relate to many of Wyatt’s struggles with transphobia, being misgendered and deadnamed, and his dysphoria. But the lesson learned is that just because a story has representation, does not make it a GOOD story.
I would like to preface by saying that like the MC, I am also a queer trans teenager. Just as it’s important to read Own Voices books, it’s also equally important to read Own Voices reviews.
Starting off the the positives, the amount of diverse representation in the book is commendable. Diversity like this is rare in the fantasy genre, and I’m happy more YA fantasy books are making the effort to include a diverse array of characters in their story. This story includes trans, non-binary, queer relationships, polyamory, disability rep, and BIPOC characters.
However the representation is pretty much the ONLY good thing about this story, and even that isn’t saying much. If anything that’s my best guess why I’m constantly seeing so much hype for this story. Everything else that’s supposed to make a story good amounts to nothing in this book. The writing style and the inclusion of internet lingo and humor ripped directly off of Tumblr and Twitter had me cringing and rolling my eyes every chapter. Not only was it incredibly dated, cringey, and fell flat as humor, it broke my immersion with the *fantasy* world building. I never want to see the words “mcfuckin”, “yeet”, “vibin”, or “I’m just a gay little worm” (I’m NOT even exaggerating on that one) in a novel ever again or I’m going to bang my head into a wall. It turns out the author admitted in an interview he used TikTok as a means of “researching teen humor”. My hot tip for any YA authors, don’t do this.
The characterizations were incredibly weak. The side characters were under developed, had the exact same sense of humor and way of speaking, and were unremarkable. Most of the queer characters just felt like collections of stereotypes plucked off of Tumblr or Twitter, and that’s what their entire personalities and senses of humor revolved around. It seemed that the author was so caught up trying to write DIVERSE characters, he forgot to write diverse CHARACTERS. I’m shocked that this is an “own voices” story considering the poor writing for the queer characters and how they felt more like internet caricatures of queer people. I would honestly use this book as an example of how to NOT write queer characters. The world also felt very unfinished and inconsistent. On one hand it can be argued that this is the first installment of a duology and the characters and world will likely develop more in the sequel. But I’ve read so many series that were able to do so much more with less of a word count just within a first installment. And considering that this book is 422 PAGES long, there is very little excuse for having such bland writing.
The antagonists were some of the worst I’ve seen. The main villain is barely seen nor heard from throughout the story and he has some of the most basic, cliche villain dialogue that had me rolling my eyes. He was literally a rip off of the blue-eyed-blond-haired Neo Nazi villain trope you see in most action movies. And what kind of name is Derek for a fantasy villain??? The twist villain had me confused and beyond annoyed. And again, immediately started spouting off the same cliche lines and “maniacal laughter” you see in every other basic cheesy story once they were revealed to be an antagonist. Antagonists are usually some of my favorite characters in the story since they work to drive the plot and conflict, but these characters were so little seen and so bland that I couldn’t take them nor their threats seriously. Also how on earth was Derek still in position of the Guard despite being an obvious terrorist against the monarchy? That made no sense?
The story lends itself to be a “political allegory” with “radical” views as the author states, yet it completely lacks subtly. The author treats his audience like they’re incompetent and have to have their hand held throughout the entire story. The main character literally explains the parallels between the treatment of witches by the Fae and persecution of queer people in the human world, as if that wasn’t completely obvious. There are also many more spelled out parallels regarding police brutality, social justice movements, and defunding the police that felt very heavy handed. At the end of the book there was an out of the blue scene that basically mirrored the “dismantle the police” movement, which felt very out of place and not even realistic dialogue for one of the characters. And then at the VERY END of the book, after hundreds of pages of trying to sort out the heir situation, suddenly the characters pull a Game of Thrones season 7 and argue for Democracy?? Where was all this at for the first 420 pages?? Both these scenes felt so heavy handed and random and just felt like the author was trying to squeeze in as many social justice messages as he could without bothering to cohesively weave them into the story. Plenty of young adult stories do an excellent job of writing allegories for modern issues in a complex, nuanced way while allowing the readers to understand the issues. This book is not one of them.
I’m usually one to LOVE an “unlikable” character, but Wyatt is beyond one of the most annoying, edgy, and stagnant protagonists I’ve ever read in a story. I honestly felt nothing towards him, he could have dropped dead and I wouldn’t have cared. He’s not smart. He not kind. He’s not brave. He’s not good at magic and he doesn’t even TRY to learn despite constantly COMPLAINING how he can’t control his abilities and that he’s a “monster”. He doesn’t lead. He’s not anything. He contributes nothing to the story except through reacting to plot points thrown in to make the book less boring. And the constant self depreciating monologue and self wallowing pitty party worked against him and only made me agree with his negative self talk even more. I also felt uncomfortable with the way he talked about some of the female characters, especially Briar and all the sexual comments he made about her. And his off handed remark about the lesbian queens left a bad taste in my mouth. Can we please have trans male characters in books without writing them to be borderline misogynists?
The “romance” in between Wyatt and Emyr is some of the weakest I’ve seen. I usually love a good queer enemies-to-lovers story, but I felt absolutely nothing towards the two. Maybe I’m just not a fan of the “fated mates” trope or the fact that most of their romantic chemistry was from when they were children, but I couldn’t feel any excitement towards them. There was way more telling instead of showing when it came to their interactions, mainly consisting of just Wyatt internally moaning about how attractive yet annoying Emyr is anytime he’s on page.
I wanted to like this book so badly. Trans characters are a rarity in fiction, especially in fantasy. I was able to relate to many of Wyatt’s struggles with transphobia, being misgendered and deadnamed, and his dysphoria. But the lesson learned is that just because a story has representation, does not make it a GOOD story.
Content Warnings
Graphic: Transphobia, Blood, and Death of parent
Moderate: Child abuse, Gore, and Pregnancy
Minor: Adult/minor relationship, Deadnaming, Sexual assault, Terminal illness, Grief, and Sexual harassment