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A review by hexijosh
Twice Bitten by Dave Ferraro
1.0
This ebook was a random purchase for me, seeing as it was only $1.99 and I was looking for something gay-themed to read. Plus, I knew that if I were to put my own work on nook/kindle, I would want someone to buy it. Unfortunately, it's hardly worth the time or money.
The concept is this: Jesse, a gay teenage film/music star crosses paths with a vampire and a werewolf all in the same evening. Before the night is over, Jesse finds himself dying of a werewolf bite and being turned into a vampire to be saved. As it turns out, this creates a super were-vamp hybrid homosexual.
Seriously, this is just a fuster cluck all around. There are rampant grammatical errors, inconsistencies within the story and all of the characters are so flat that you can barely tell them apart. And that's only the beginning. Characters fall in love with each other after only a few hours and they talk like Live Journal grade fanfiction. The setting is completely unrealistic. Also, I've spent time in NYC, and I can safely tell you that within at 10 mile radius it is impossible to see stars through the overpowering city lights.
It feels like the author wrote this straight through and made no revisions to the text. As well, it comes off as a gay mash-up between Twilight, True Blood and a C-grade CW television show. This is far from ready for a wide audience, but with editing and a lot of tweaking, it could be very enjoyable.
So, Mr. Ferraro, don't stop writing, but try to bring more originality to the table and get everyone you know to read through your work over and over until the final product is ready for the rest of us.
The concept is this: Jesse, a gay teenage film/music star crosses paths with a vampire and a werewolf all in the same evening. Before the night is over, Jesse finds himself dying of a werewolf bite and being turned into a vampire to be saved. As it turns out, this creates a super were-vamp hybrid homosexual.
Seriously, this is just a fuster cluck all around. There are rampant grammatical errors, inconsistencies within the story and all of the characters are so flat that you can barely tell them apart. And that's only the beginning. Characters fall in love with each other after only a few hours and they talk like Live Journal grade fanfiction. The setting is completely unrealistic. Also, I've spent time in NYC, and I can safely tell you that within at 10 mile radius it is impossible to see stars through the overpowering city lights.
It feels like the author wrote this straight through and made no revisions to the text. As well, it comes off as a gay mash-up between Twilight, True Blood and a C-grade CW television show. This is far from ready for a wide audience, but with editing and a lot of tweaking, it could be very enjoyable.
So, Mr. Ferraro, don't stop writing, but try to bring more originality to the table and get everyone you know to read through your work over and over until the final product is ready for the rest of us.