A review by sharonskinner
The Navigator by Eoin McNamee
1.0
This might be a decent story, but there are too many good books out there to spend time with one that is poorly written.
Lazy writing: protagonist's description via looking in the mirror, not just once, but twice!
Passive voice throughout the narrative. I think the word "was" is used in nearly every sentence.
Non-specific description: a dire lack of sensory details beyond sight and touch left me ungrounded and rudderless in the setting.
Cliche: in one case, twice in the same paragraph, which is when I decided I'd had enough.
Lazy writing: protagonist's description via looking in the mirror, not just once, but twice!
Passive voice throughout the narrative. I think the word "was" is used in nearly every sentence.
Non-specific description: a dire lack of sensory details beyond sight and touch left me ungrounded and rudderless in the setting.
Cliche: in one case, twice in the same paragraph, which is when I decided I'd had enough.