A review by jamiereadthis
The Pearl by Geoffrey Knight

2.0

The one writing tic I hate the most:

Sentences.

Broken up into fragments.

On different lines.

Because… why?

I’d almost like to re-read the story written in a different style to see if it helped. I say almost because it might still be full of over the top emotional melodrama. Making the story smaller would improve it by an order of magnitude.